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Thanks man. Yeah I can be a bit overly helpful though so let me know if I ever go overboard with my comments, haha. I love the idea of this clip and I have to ask if she does more than just grow large. Like, I mean with her boyfriend writing erotic fiction, I would imagine that she might, at times, find herself somewhat excited by her new endowments, or maybe she changes a bit of her personality or something. The idea of the software and someone writing stuff really lends to all sorts of ideas!
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TOTALLY agree with you on this! That's why I buy a lot of this group's clips, the name is "MAXGROWTH" not, "somewhat moderate enhancement". I LOVE the how big the girls get in the clips, especially in the hourglass clips (even if it's not realistic but, if that mattered, I wouldn't buy it).Originally posted by Laughingmann View PostComment
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She does alot of enthusiastic exploration of her new assetsOriginally posted by Laughingmann View Post
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OK, so I shouldn't have, I mean like really shouldn't have, but I bought this. Because it's such a big purchase, and because I have nothing better to do, I'm going to give you my thoughts on it. This is all constructive, and none of it is meant to be personal, so please don't take it that way. I love what you do, and I think you have a GREAT actress with Koa. My intentions are merely to help. So, here goes:
As I've said before, I'm a big fan of your work, Max. I've enjoyed every clip I've downloaded from you, even if the acting wasn't always stellar. You always have great growth scenes and they look fantastic, and I love that you don't shy away from the enormous BE.
However, with this video I felt that while it was good, there was a ton of lost potential with it. The setting and especially your actress allowed for a variety of ideas, but they were never really expanded upon.
First, let me say what I like about it. I enjoyed the clip for it's acting, and especially for the premise. The expansion was great! Not too much process but in some ways it's nice to have a few "poof" BE scenes because it can be refreshing. I LOVE that she went up and down in size. The way she reacts and her more improved lines are great and help keep the dialogue from sounding repeated. Koa is an amazing actress and you should definitely keep her! The props looked nice (the leg props were a little lumpy, but not distractingly so) and they were showed off nicely! While my biggest issue was how you used the concept (see below) when you did change it up, it was done nicely.
Now for the cons. While it was nice to see her exploration of her assets, there was actually too much of it for each expansion. This took up the majority of the time and didn't allow for the idea of the clip to really grow. It didn't need to be much shorter, but after a while with her just standing and staring at herself turning in the mirror, it became redundant. It was nice, but for the idea of the clip it hindered it some. (and I have more to say on this but I'm putting it in the next section.)
My biggest complaint is that the premise wasn't used to it's full potential. I love the Master PC like idea of having a word program that could alter someone's form. The idea that it works off the writer's description makes it even better. The idea was used well when you did things such as making them saggy, or making her rear end larger.
However, there is so much more you could've done with Koa that would've have required any extra props, just acting (which Koa has in spades!) For one, the teasers at the beginning ( the ghost, the radiation, and the secret drug) should have led somewhere. The drug did, obviously, but the others could have as well. A ghost could've possessed her and made her and made her want to strip against her will (as she said.) The radiation could've made her larger only when she breathed in. You could then reset it at the end of each little set.
Coupled with that is her reactions. Her acting was great, but she should've been given more to do. When she first grows, her breasts seem to just be large. That is fine. The second time, though, her breasts are obviously more sensitive and she enjoys them a bit more. This should've been expanded on more, as it would separate it from the previous clip where she also had just grown. The fact that the props don't mimic breasts exactly should have been used more, such as when she mentions them being "very perky." More of these lines would've added to the flavor.
The idea of them becoming "saggy" and jiggly was done well, and in my opinion is an example of how the rest of the clip should've been done. However to add to what I said in the last paragraph, her mentioning that real boobs still don't act that way would've been a fun addition to the clip. To add on to that, there is a scene where she looks up, and then down, and begins to very furiously jiggle her breasts, even hopping up and down. It almost seems like she's compelled to do this at first, but then it just ends up she's just testing them. With the premise of the clip, you could've had the writer make it where she begins to jiggle them because she feels they should be, or something. A line like "why can't I stop jiggling/playing with them?!" with a happy expression would've improved this point. Something else that could've been done with the expansions would be to have her perhaps bounce around on them, finding it fun and wanting to because the "script" changed her to want to do that.
The last part of the clip was done nice, however, the part where he says "maybe make her a little trashy?" never comes into play. I expected her to suddenly decide that her breasts jutting out wasn't so bad, or for her to act differently, but that never happened. It's not a big complaint, because it is there slightly when she enjoys her new grown butt and thighs.
Mostly, my complaints boil down to the fact that with the idea of the clip, you could have altered her mind more, or even her body more with budget permitting. Just having her get large breasts is nice, but there's a dozen videos on this site that has that. You came very close with changing the hair and her different expansions, but there was room for so much more. Personality changes, physical changes, being compelled to do things, sensitivity changes, and dialogue to help would've added a lot to this clip. It is nice to see her look at her self but for the price and the runtime, I feel like this was a missed opportunity.
All in all, this is a great clip though. I still enjoyed it and you did some great things with it. I would say that the price was a little bit steep for what we got, I would think the same price as Koa's previous clip would be more appropriate, but this is just the opinion of one person. I think sort of like some movies I've seen, my problem isn't really with what the clip was, but what it COULD have been. There was great potential here, with both the premise and the actress, but it never quite made it.
I hope that perhaps you might revisit the idea someday, with hopefully the same actress. I think that it still lends to so much potential (especially if the writer character doesn't realize that he changed his girlfriend.) for a clip. It was used nicely and I think ya'll could do even more with it. I still recommend this clip to anyone on the fence about it, because as I said, it's a great clip.
Please don't take any of this personal, as I love your stuff and I merely wish to add some criticism. I'm sorry this ended up being so long, but I get wordy at times. I hope you continue to be able to make clips as you are great at it and I enjoy your actresses and ideas.~Inappropriately commenting on random threads since...whenever I joined the site.Comment
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whoo-boy Laughingmann...you don't mess around I'll try to briefly respond, and I do appreciate all the critiques, no one should feel like they have to mince words with me.
First off, thanx for the purchase and the kind words.
okay...most clips are roughly $1 a minute, so at 29 minutes for $24 TMC has priced it at a discount (which is good considering it is long).
As far as too much body exploration after each expansion...well, honestly, alot of guys complain we don't have enough of that in our clips (and perhaps it could have been pared down just a bit) and this was a response to that feedback.
Some of the things you bring up seem to be personal preference on your part, which it TOTALLY fine. Glad to hear your viewpoint.
There is a ton of details that go into making these clips and the more dialogue and "scripted" action you have the harder it is to make all those details click together. Alot of our scripts get hacked down as we shoot because we only have so much time with the model(s) and sometimes we just have to shave the least essential things off.
I do agree that "Hank" could have had more influence over the expansions in specific relation to what could have been minor changes, that would not have effected our time or prop usage very much. I often wish we had more time or money or better props, etc. to make a really good clip GREAT...but thinking that way just drives you nuts in the long run. I personally feel really good about this clip and what we were able to accomplish as a whole, but there is always room for improvement Maybe in the future we can re-visit the script for a Part Two and try and tighten things up. This was shot before the Maze clip and was our very first multi-actor clip, as well as our first time with Koa, so I think we have learned a bunch since then.
thanx to everyone for all the honest and sincere input
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Yeah, it was in no way a bad clip, I just could see where it could've gone, haha. I recommend anyone buy it because it IS a good clip, and I see what you're saying about the price. It wasn't so much that she explored herself but that it didn't really go that far. After the first few times she turned left or right to look at her profile, it was mostly just a repeat action and it lost something. I think it's fine that she's exploring, just make sure they do more next time, haha. Like, have her maybe bounce off the couch some or kind of walk around, or pose a little. Just something to mix it up.
But like you said a lot of this is personal preference, and I can certainly vouch for the clip being great. If you do make a part two sometime, I'll definitely be there for that! Also, I want to say that I very much liked the look of the jiggly boobs this time around, and I hope you'll include them at that size in more clips!~Inappropriately commenting on random threads since...whenever I joined the site.Comment
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The jiggly/soft boobs are sort of an in-exact science. The props are fragile and never quite turn out the same each time we make them. It's like freaking alchemy sometimes I'm glad you like the effect though, and we'll certainly keep doing it.
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Well, I guess it's time for my feedback. Of course, Maxgrowth probably already knows how my post will go. First, I will agree about the sagging part! I loved it, although I liked the perky ones, too. She got so sad when they just slumped down! Anyway, I liked most of the clip, including the hair getting longer. I do like the extra exploration of the assets (never had a gripe on it) and, I won't say there was "way too much" but, I can say it was little bit much (just a bit). Well, that's actually the only thing I had. >.> I'll go to the other things I liked, then. I REALLY liked the idea of an outside influence unknowingly causing the expansion. BRILLIANT! The multiple expansions were good, too. Grows here, shrinks, then it goes again, sags, then gets perky again, not to mention the butt expansion. I found myself rewinding a lot (once my phone played it correctly). So, I can say this once again for the next clip: WHY HAVEN'T YOU TAKEN MY MONEY?!Comment
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WHY HAVEN'T YOU TAKEN MY MONEY?!
I don't know man..lol. I'm not involved in the site operations here, but I'll see what I can find out about for you.
thanx Bigdaddy, glad you enjoyed the clip!Comment
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No need for that. I was just implying that it would take 3 acts of congress to keep my from buying one of your clips (or death).Originally posted by maxgrowth View PostComment
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aahh..gotcha! I can be a little slow on the uptakeOriginally posted by Bigdaddyjh2002 View Post
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